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Dance
Author: Daphne
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(Added on Dec 6, 2003)
(This month 56436 readers) (Total 64517 readers) |
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A woman meets her Master for the first time unexpectedly.... |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
deepbluemm
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Apr 11, 2004 |
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Excellent realism. Daphne writes just the way that I like it. Believable and dreamy! Well done! (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Cleo671
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Dec 12, 2003 |
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I overlooked the 'H's.. wow, I like the way they interact, the way he talks to her had me hooked!
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| Reviewer:
Alex Bragi
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Dec 10, 2003 |
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Daphne, Daphne, Daphne, this good, very good idea. Lovely clear crisp descriptions, believable dialog, and hotter than hot action! Can I really ask for more? Sure I can - more pulleez!
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I thought the ellipsises may have been a little over done, they should really only be used where words are missing, and unfortunately about two thirds down you changed tenses.
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“She sees the flash of something ...” - Your story begins in past but swaps here to present, and then back again to past a few paragraphs down. It’s a very good read, so how about correcting this little hiccup? (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Daphne
(Edit) (Dec 22, 2003)
- You're right Alex...I hadn't noticed that....thank you...i will definately be more careful in future....still..very glad you enjoyed it...
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| Reviewer:
Faibhar
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Dec 7, 2003 |
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Forget about a sash, cutlass, clammy viscous (sic) grip, and repeated use of the capital "H"ss, this story is riveting in its own way. Well written with a unique POV, "Dance" provides vivid characters in an entertaining setting. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Daphne
(Edit) (Dec 7, 2003)
- Faibhar..so glad you enjoyed it...am paying closer attention to the "H"s.....chapter two is now submitted and hopefully added soon
Daphne
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