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Brian Gets Caught And Pays The Price
Author: Marion
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(Added on Nov 15, 2003)
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Brian is a compulsive masturbator with a desire for the S/M lifestyle and has gay fantasies. When his wife catches him he begs for forgiveness and punishment. She delivers on the punishment. Consentual becomes reluctant as she reveals her intent to totally emasculate and dehumanize him! |
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| Reviewer:
slaveneedledick
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Jul 26, 2004 |
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intense and interesting story. However when brian was licking rose that part turned me off. (8/10)
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D. Atrocity
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May 26, 2004 |
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I LOOOOVE the twist at the end! I wish I had some of your talent! (10/10)
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trainmanretep
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Nov 27, 2003 |
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very intense story with a surprise ending. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Marion
(Edit) (Nov 29, 2003)
- Glad you enjoyed the story. Hope it gave you the orgasm you were seeking!
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| Reviewer:
Alex Bragi
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Nov 17, 2003 |
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I don't know if this is a true account or not, but I can tell you this, I know a lot of people just love the idea of reading about a real life experience. Oh, and if it is a true story, Brian, you put a whole new meaning on the word 'slut', slut, you really do.
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I felt the opening paragraph read a little clumsily, but maybe that's just me?
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The actual story, in my opinion, is very good.
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I'm not a big fan of incest, and while this doesn't actually contain any, the tease between the mother and son is just that. I don't like snuff either, but the gentle hint was damned exciting too. So many little subtleties throughout this story teased and tormented me, so I just had to keep reading.
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A couple of times I thought the believability had been stretched too far but then, without giving too much away here, it was all made clear by the time I had finished reading
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The only thing that could have made it more enjoyable for me, would have been the introduction of dialog earlier in the story. I feel sure I would have enjoyed reading about exactly what Mother had to say, but again that's just me.
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- Replied by:
Marion
(Edit) (Nov 17, 2003)
- Alex,
Thanks for a really comprehensive review of the story. I'm one who, like you, like getting into the dialogue. I agree, waiting was a mistake. I do like instilling fear into characters and will often times hint at snuff. I find the threat more erotic than following through with it. Curious. You didn't mention Brian's reactions and impressions of Rose's vaginal area. As a reader, did you find it erotic and suitable for his emasculation, just repulsive, unnecessary to the story. Curious about your reaction. As the writer I found it erotically degrading, but I questioned how the readers would react. I've read a lot of forced sex senerios, but usually it is fair haired beauties forced to do something with burly, ugly men. Cannot recall a story where the male victim is forced to perform for an obese, ugly woman who most would consider repulsive. Appreciate your thoughts if you care to send them along.
Thanks again for your input and the kind words, but your criticisms were valid and appreciated. I'm glad you basically enjoyed the story.
Marion
- Replied by:
Alex Bragi
(Edit) (Nov 19, 2003)
- Rose - well I can only comment on her from a female point of view. Yes, I understand exactly what you mean about her not being the stereotyical Domme. She sure breaks the busty beautiful blond domme mold doesn't she? While she isn't everyone's fantasy, that not to say some will really 'enjoy' her. Having said that I have to be honest and say I think this portion of your story may have a limited appeal. Personally, I don't think she needed to that repulsive or that you needed to be that graphic to crush poor little Brian, but I then other readers may disagree.
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Maybe this scene was more about domination and submission than sex per se? Perhaps Mattie's need and desire to force him to do something he found so repulsive, and his willingness to comply, after some reserve, gave this story a stronger D/s feel? I would be interested to know what others think.
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