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A Year of Rape
Author: Mark
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(Added on Aug 16, 2003)
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A terminally ill man decided to repay the system after the courts let a woman, who accidently killed his wife and unborn child, get away with a slap on the hand. Part one deals with rapes that he commited in four months time. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
ak_boston
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Jan 4, 2016 |
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<br /><b>Warning</b>: Function eregi_replace() is deprecated in <b>/home/bdsmlibr/public_html/stories/review_add.php</b> on line <b>40</b><br /> (7/10)
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mkemse
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Apr 10, 2004 |
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intresting concept for a story, he has nothing to loose, so what would you do in the last days of your life to be kinky (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Dee Driscoll
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Aug 25, 2003 |
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First off, the story should have "snuff" as one of the codes. It is true that the murder happening in the story is not by intention, yet, it is a result of a violent sexual act and I figure that people averse to snuff content would want to know about this in advance.
The storyline is good. The premise of the story is good and it is easy to see that the action could go anywhere, getting into more and more savage and bizzare areas (which it does) as the main character loses sense of moral and conscience. The part with the abduction is by far the best because it combines rape with forced submission which is obviously of a higher symbolical order, thus providing deeper reading pleasure. A vague link to Ellis's "American Psycho" can be identified in the main character's absolute abandon of moral and burning urge to rape and hurt females.
However, the story has two big problems: language and characters.
Language: aside from some minor grammar errors (I assume the author is not a native speaker), greater burden are some genuinly strange word choices that make the story sound almost like a parody at places. Presumably, they are chosen in order to enrich the language and add playfulness to it, but they frequently sound out of place. Furthermore, the overabundant use of passive tense makes for many awkward sentences that just disrupt the flow.
Still, the biggest drawback is the failure to actually develop the main character. He is reduced to one emotion: anger, but despite his uncurable disease and the loss of his family, his anger doesn't have the gravity of someone who has stopped being human in the usual sense of the word. Instead, his anger is rather shallow and unconvincing: his hate towards women or black people that could have been coloured far better and made him scarier and more fascinating just has token properties.
Moreover and along the same lines, most of the story is told in a very flat voice, on one hand apparently completely unaware of the extent of cruelty and depravity at hand, and on the other still not raditating inhuman coldness of someone who has stepped across to the "other side".
A little more development in this department could greatly benefit the story that has a good premise and a good storyline. (6/10)
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