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The Old Drunks Revenge
Author: Davo
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(Added on Aug 9, 2003)
(This month 48250 readers) (Total 57434 readers) |
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Story of an old drunk who seeks revenge on society. On his final legs with nothing to lose he will make society pay, starting with 2 young girls. |
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Average (?):  (5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Dee Driscoll
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Aug 11, 2003 |
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This starts well enough but then just loses the plot. It's way too unbelievable: the first girl was supposed to be tied up (her hands on her back) and then we see her masturbating while being violated, which makes me think the author didn't proof read the story well enough. Also, of course, the girls give in too quickly, even for a fantasy, a little more effort in that section wouldn't have hurt. And the final paragraph reads almost like a parody. I applaud the idea that this actually stimulated our unlikely hero to mend his broken life, but thrown in like this, as an afterthought, it's just plain silly.
However, the language is good and it is obvious the author can write quite well. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
boccaccio2000g
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Aug 10, 2003 |
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An unpleasant story from a writer who has a pretty decent command of the language, and who is probably capable of better things. One sentence that jumped out at me as being odd: "I looked down at my cock which I have not seen in a long time." Personally I treat mine like an airline ticket -- I check to make sure it's still there several times a day. (5/10)
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Emily
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Aug 10, 2003 |
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It reads like a confession, and a poor one at that. (5/10)
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