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A Strong and Continued Inclination
Author: PenChant
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(Added on Jun 20, 2003)
(This month 23183 readers) (Total 56219 readers) |
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A father and experienced master takes on two new students; his daughter and her willful friend. |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
jip
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Aug 22, 2006 |
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Exiting story. A lot of movement. (9/10)
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wildandi
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May 7, 2005 |
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Can't wait for more! (9/10)
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Wyn
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Feb 10, 2004 |
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Interesting beginning. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
crickette
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Dec 4, 2003 |
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Pretty good story. It was short but not rushed. Would make a great first chapter. (7/10)
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e.e. norcod
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Sep 12, 2003 |
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Good story, fair to middling writing skills, the comments of the other reviewers should be taken positively. I agree that the dialogue is a bit stilted, the desciptions stereotypical and the pace a bit too fast. But these can be remedied in further chapters. I lot the plot and the characters show promise. If things improve in the 3rd and subsequent downloads I will raise my rating. The author should definitely keep at it. For a first posting this is very well done! (7/10)
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annasherwood
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Jun 24, 2003 |
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dialogue was a little stilted, and (a personal pet peeve:) anuses don't have natural lubrication...so, a good story, well written, but with some inaccuracies and lack of natural dialogue (6/10)
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LadyLibra
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Jun 24, 2003 |
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I like the fact that we will see 2 types of training.... maybe teaching his daughter both roles F/f. (9/10)
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DaveDom
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Jun 21, 2003 |
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Compared to other stories I got some excitement, but not the full pleasure it could have been. Keep working on the story line. (8/10)
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Nitrofox
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Jun 20, 2003 |
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This was a decent story. It did move a little fast, but I really enjoyed what action there was. I hope for more additions to the story soon. (7/10)
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tink
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Jun 20, 2003 |
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Very well written -- no noticeable grammar or spelling problems to knock me out of the moment.
And oh, what a moment it is! :) I'm looking forward to the continuing story of these two girls' training by their new Master -- one his daughter and the other, her friend. (9/10)
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Hornyreddevil
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Jun 20, 2003 |
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love the story plot but i feel that it moves a little too quickly. not only that but it has some spots where it feels like the author just didnt try to hard (5/10)
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