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Rome
Author: Blackstar
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(Added on May 25, 2003)
(This month 87658 readers) (Total 128961 readers) |
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A Roman lady of noble birth is sentence to death fo the murder of 2 husbands in the Roman arena. Her remaining family also loses Citizen status. As a high born Lady she, is made a example of and suffers public multiple rape using animals. Her two daughters and son are sold as slaves into prostitution. |
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Average (?):  (4.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Martin
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Nov 1, 2004 |
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The story is surprising original but needs more editing. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
Shaditu
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Apr 30, 2004 |
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the story is enjoyable... but lack of something to make it memorable. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Nitrofox
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May 31, 2003 |
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This is a pretty decent story. It has a good possible plot, but needs to be improved. The spelling is bad, but not "shocking" as my compatriots below seem to believe. Editing and some revising would make this story far better. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
ltlmisst
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May 30, 2003 |
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There were some great ideas in this story, however the editing is just appalling. The story chops and changes scene mid sentence, whole sections are repeated and the spelling is shocking. Unfortunately the author hasn't developed his great ideas much throughout this three part story and by the end I was getting sick of the repetitious description of what was going to happen. If you persevere with this story there are some very surreal sentences in Part 3! Blackstar, I suggest you get a proof reader and continue developing your cum-inducing storylines. (3/10)
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- Replied by:
Nitrofox
(Edit) (May 31, 2003)
- Perhaps I didn't read far enough into the story, but either you have never read truly bad writing, or you have a very exaggerated idea of what is "shocking". I refer you to stories such as: School Girls are Disciplined and Kidnaping and Training. Those are examples of truly shocking bad writing. This may be bad, but it's not THAT bad.
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lex ludite
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May 29, 2003 |
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The concept is good, but the execution is totally flawed by a series of unending typos, misspellings, grammatical blunders and the like that completely distracted me from reading this story. Please get someone to edit your stuff. I get the feeling that english is not your native tongue or you slept through high school. (3/10)
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