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My Life In Hell
Author: Les1204
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(Added on May 11, 2003)
(This month 15702 readers) (Total 38701 readers) |
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A woman suffers alone thru various methods of bondage and torture. |
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Average (?):  (5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Apr 22, 2004 |
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with the subject matter, should have been better (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
ladys_maid
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May 12, 2003 |
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This reminded me of one of those video clips you see posted on the net. It was just a scene, with no context and no characters - I would not consider it a story but more a description of a bdsm session. I agree that the writer has some skill and imagination, but the piece was far too short to demonstrate real quality or story telling ability. I also agree with the earlier reviewer about the repetition of the chapter openings. Maybe it was written that way for effect, but it didn't work - it is a distraction that draws the reader away from the story for a moment with an odd sense of deja vu. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
kemosabe
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May 11, 2003 |
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I kept wondering how the two protagonist got where they are and why. Wasn't there a beginning in there someplace? Far too short to develop any eroticism. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Powerone
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May 11, 2003 |
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The writer has talent, but I am not sure if it showed her. About the shortest I have seen, extremely large paragraphs, spelling errors, etc.
Might have been a better story if you took this as the middle of the story and now put a beginning and an end to it.
(5/10)
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| Reviewer:
boccaccio2000g
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May 11, 2003 |
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Clearly the author has some imagination and some talent. But stories need characters and motivation, too. And paragraphs.
Perhaps the characterization and motivation will be added later, but dear author, there's only one first installment to a story -- and you have to grab your audience then -- because if you don't, they won't be there for the second. But keep at it -- your writing shows nice intensity. (4/10)
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kittenfemme
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May 11, 2003 |
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The chapter introductions seemed repetitive. That aspect pulled me out of the story. This is interesting and imaginative none the less. I hope it continues. (6/10)
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tsosie
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May 11, 2003 |
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Very short, definitely seems to be part of a longer story. Interesting idea, who knows where she is, but there are many grammar errors to improve on. (5/10)
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