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The Village of Agony and Ecstasy
Author: Powerone
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(Added on Apr 16, 2003)
(This month 80340 readers) (Total 181109 readers) |
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A tale of long time ago when women were taken from their villages to become sex slaves by cruel men that had no regard for them except to satisfy their sexual perversions. |
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Average (?):  (9/10) |
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| Reviewer:
ramses
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Nov 4, 2006 |
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Just love it. (10/10)
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mkemse
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Feb 19, 2006 |
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where you are good you are good (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Terry Gabriola
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Jun 11, 2003 |
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I have to agree with many of the comments below - that it's all a bit predictable, that there are a few stylistic flaws. Nevertheless, there are good visual images created and plenty of detail: I enjoyed reading it, which is the key thing. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Nitrofox
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Jun 10, 2003 |
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This was an exceedingly predictable story. However, it mas moderately enjoyable. There were a few problems toward the beginning, in particular the "taunt" word, which was used improperly. Also, there was at least one fragment: "Wonder what my family is thinking?", or something to that effect. Also, a paragraph ended without punctualization, which appeared magically at the beginning of the next paragraph. ;-). In any case, it was an okay story. I expected better from Powerone, especially as regards spelling. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
sinsationalsub
(Edit) (Jun 13, 2003)
- Punctuation is my fault...not Powerone's...bless his heart...He tries to tell me...lol...I am a novice and learning...thanks for your corrections..I will heed your words...sinsationalsub
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| Reviewer:
ilytat
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Apr 27, 2003 |
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Very nice story. As always, his stories are very detailed and well written. However, he is known by a few fellow erotica aficionados to not respond to emails that praise his work. I, for one, will stop reading his work because of this. Doesn't take much time to type a short "Thank you for your compliments" email. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Powerone
(Edit) (Apr 27, 2003)
- I usually do not write a response to a review, not wanting to throw a lot of flowery verbag within the reviews, but I felt I had to respond to ilytat's comments. I respond to all of my e-mail (which is quite considerable since I post on 9 sites and my own). I looked at ilytat's profile and it was basically empty. When I tried to e-mail, it came back with:
"Sorry! That user has specified that they do not wish to receive emails through this board. If you still wish to send an email to this user, please contact the administrator and they may be able to help."
If you would like to contact me, I am always availble at controlher@hotmail.com. And I always respond.
Powerone
- Replied by:
ilytat
(Edit) (Apr 28, 2003)
- I did not email you from this list. I emailed you privately using my yahoo and hotmail accounts.
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| Reviewer:
billjam
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Apr 25, 2003 |
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This is a premise I've always enjoyed. I found the writing and language choices of the author also matched my tastes. Looking forward to further installments of this story. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
peachmellon
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Apr 19, 2003 |
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~~ anticipating on more~~>. please write more.. thank you so much (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
baerchen24
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Apr 17, 2003 |
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Awesome keep it coming! (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
LoKi Kat
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Apr 16, 2003 |
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Awesome so far. I definately hope to see more of this story unfold.
Good detail, and nice use of the language. (I get tired of seeing pussy, cock, cunt, etc all the time)
One of my biggest pet peeves however, you did do.. and that is using the word taunt instead of taut.
" Bella knew her young supple
body well. She knew that she was a real woman. She had been told that she was
beautiful. Her skin was creamy and tan, firm and taunt. "
From Webster.com--
Taunt--
Main Entry: 1taunt
Pronunciation: 'tont, 'tänt
Function: noun
Date: circa 1529
: a sarcastic challenge or insult
Taut--
Main Entry: 1taut
Pronunciation: 'tot
Function: adjective
Etymology: Middle English tought
Date: 14th century
1 a : having no give or slack : tightly drawn b : HIGH-STRUNG, TENSE <taut nerves>
2 a : kept in proper order or condition <a taut ship> b (1) : not loose or flabby (2) : marked by economy of structure and detail <a taut story>
- taut·ly adverb
- taut·ness noun
But, otherwise all is well and I do hope you continue writing on it! :) (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Equalizer
(Edit) (Apr 16, 2003)
- Maybe that's just the way he was taut ;-)
I can't help thinking there are a lot of writers more in need of corrections than Powerone.
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LoKi Kat
(Edit) (Apr 25, 2003)
- LOL! Well I certainly didn't mean to single Powerone out... I see this mistake more often than not.. I will put this up on the forum ~grins~
Just my petpeeve that I would like for all writers to take note of.
I loved this story however and hence taking the time to review it.
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Nitrofox
(Edit) (Jun 10, 2003)
- Bah, Loki, you just had to post about what was annoying me as well. You are a cruel cruel ... kat? Ah well. I can only agree about the taut/taunt thing.
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| Reviewer:
Equalizer
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Apr 16, 2003 |
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Good opening to story, well written and definitely erotic. The plot so far is standard fare, reminding me of some published BDSM books. I'll be interested to see where the authors can take this one. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
boccaccio2000g
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Apr 16, 2003 |
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A promising start. The first chapter has excellent subject matter, but some stylistic flaws. Too many overlong paragraphs, and a number of stretches with choppy sentences. In one of the long paragraphs (a little bit past halfway in Chapter 1 IIRC), there were six or eight consecutive sentences beginning with "She". That kind of syntactic repetition should be avoided. That said, I like the characterization, setting, atmosphere etc better in this story than I do in most of Powerone's. A good collaboration. (8/10)
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