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Slacker's Revenge
Author: Kallie Thomas
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(Added on Dec 7, 2002)
(This month 15291 readers) (Total 36722 readers) |
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A sullen stoner's attitude takes a sudden turn when he's left alone for a week with his hated sister. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
rcb
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Feb 27, 2003 |
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Another good story from Kallie (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
CoffinNail
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Dec 29, 2002 |
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Very nice, but I would also like to see another installment, let us know how our poor victim fares.
--CN (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Harold
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Dec 15, 2002 |
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First of all, I have to disagree with everyone else about the physical description of the heroine. Who cares what color her eyes were? It has nothing to do with the plot and in general, I would prefer to provide those details myself rather than have them thrust upon me by the author. Those details should be omitted unless necessary to drive the plot.
The author has done a fine job of creating two repulsive characters. In too many stories, we get the heroines bra size but she seems to be missing a personality. This approach is much better.
What there is here is well done, but my big problem with this story is that it's incomplete. I'm not exactly thrilled with the practice of posting stories in installments, but considering that the author has posted another story since this one was posted, I assume there won't be any more to this one. It needs an ending and doesn't have one.
Can't someone just once please finish something? (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
BDSM_Tourguide
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Dec 9, 2002 |
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I would have preferred their roles to have been reversed and for her to torture the dumb, drug-abusing moron into submission. Maybe then she could have gotten him to do something around the farm. This story did nothing for me but make me agry. If only this thug had been as motivated to do his chores as he was to devise torture devices, which honestly seem beyond his mental capability to put together in the first place, then maybe she wouldn't have treated him like a second-rate screw-up in the first place. Which, to me, is what it seems he is.
As for the actual effort that went into the writing, I thought it was very good. The character development was very good. Good enough for me to get this pissed off at the male antagonist. I thought the descriptions were good, but not timely. Like bocaccio said earlier, we had to read half-through before the female is described. Something I apparently have troubles with, too. Overall, though, it is a good story. I just hope this asshole gets castrated or thrown in jail with lots of big guys named Rosie when the conclusion is read.
This also seems to be the longest review I have ever written. I will give you high marks for getting me this emotionally responsive. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
CoffinNail
(Edit) (Dec 29, 2002)
- If the story made you angry, if the characters inspired emotional responses in you, why rate it so poorly? Obviously the writer did her job--she painted characters that came to life.
--CN
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| Reviewer:
Nitrofox
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Dec 8, 2002 |
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I agree with Equalizer ... a very nasty boy! Almost makes me want to have had a bitch sister when I was growing up. I also agree with Boccaccio, more detail should have been given about the people. From the story, it doesn't even really seem that the sister is that bad, aside from a couple of sentences. (8/10)
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Equalizer
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Dec 7, 2002 |
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What a nasty nasty boy! I like the story so far and hope the author can continue to develop it. (8/10)
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boccaccio2000g
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Dec 7, 2002 |
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A somewhat disappointing effort from this fine writer. If I'm not mistaken, I believe we are more than halfway through the story (chapter?) before we find out that the heroine has blonde hair and blue eyes -- and I think that's about all we ever find out about her appearance. A big flaw, IMO, for an M/f story. Too much emphasis on paraphernalia and not enough on the people for my taste. This author usually brings terrific psychological insight to her work; but it seems lacking here. (7/10)
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