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Surprise Assembly
Author: katie lynch
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(Added on Oct 17, 2002)
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A good girl breaks a school rule and ends up with a humiliating punishment...six weeks of total nudity. Can she survivie? Could anyone? |
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Average (?):  (9.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
michaelkors
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May 29, 2012 |
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wow very nice. verty creative (10/10)
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saskatchewanslut
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Jan 11, 2012 |
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An excellent highschool story that is easily able to bypass the outlandish premise through such delicious writing and excellent scenes. Some of the set-pieces in this story were truly outstanding, a story that left me incredibly wet almost from start to finish, and one that keeps bobbing to the surface at the oddest of times. I reread it recently and it still holds up as one of the classics of not only bdsm but of the highschool/humiliation genre in particular.
The author possesses a great imagination and through the well constructed story really lets you get inside the story and really feel for Shannon and put myself in her place. I read bdsm stories to live out some fantasies and if a story does not turn me on, no matter how well it is technically written, then I don't feel it has done its job. With Surprise Assembly I cannot even remember the number of times I came, and that for me says more than anything else.
The characters are beautifully imagined and Shannon is near perfect in the way she reacts to her blossoming situation. The author really lets you inside her head, something that is very rare in this genre. They really have a grasp on the way a young girl thinks (it has been a while since I was that age but I was once, and I constantly pictured myself in Shannon's shoes and that is a rare gift).
I must say that I think the story does falter a little with the introduction of the male students being punished. This wasn't something I was interested in but I also felt that it didn't quite fit with the story and really slowed the pacing down in these sections. I was very glad that this was brief and merely a sideline but something that a good editor may have advised against. It might make its own standalone tale but in this context I felt it detracted from the whole. This did not put me off as much as it did in the “Beauty” stories which I honestly found myself skipping entire sections of.
The story does suffer from a strange ending that seems almost tacked-on, as if the author didn't really know how to finish it all off. It just didn't seem to gel that well with the rest of the story, but this is a minor complaint, though it is something that seems to happen a lot in this genre. I would have preferred a very different ending, something a lot more open that left scope for the readers imagination to continue if they chose, but that really is pure personal preference. There is much to enjoy here and this remains one of my favorite stories, one of the few I have downloaded for keeps, just in case something happens to this site one day.
(9/10)
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popandlock
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Aug 11, 2011 |
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Wow this story has been around for a long time but it sure stands the test of time, glad its still here for me to stumble on :) (9/10)
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smokescreen
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Jan 18, 2009 |
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all time classic story in NIS genre ( Naked in School ) (9/10)
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marie123
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Dec 5, 2008 |
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well written and enjoyable. (10/10)
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jep33
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Nov 3, 2007 |
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The premise for this story is absolutely preposterous and, at the same time, delightful and delicious. The author manages to pull it off with descriptive powers that are not often found in these types of stories. The story could be a fantasy for many a bad boy and girl. (10/10)
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25toLife
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Oct 2, 2006 |
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when i read this piece 3 years ago i was mesmerized by it. even today, when i read it i feel like i can actually relate to the characters, and the sex was humiliating but not torturous. in all, it's one of the best i've ever read.
what kind of an idiot would give it a 7? (10/10)
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sexyfats
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Sep 6, 2005 |
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i fell in love with shannon. guess you succeeded with your story. real good piece of work and yadda yadda yadda. cant really comment with professor kinda talk cuz im just a kid :( (9/10)
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BigCat
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Jun 21, 2005 |
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A truly remarkable piece of work. Starting with a outrageous literary conceit, you pull it off, keeping the tone and sensuality alive throughout. Wouldn't have believed that possible with a work of this length. Amazingly creative and imaginative in "keeping the hum alive." Don't remember any slideoffs. Even though I felt that the ending was a downer, having Shannon psychlogically intimidated. if not damaged, feeling that it could have (should have?) included Shannon's seeing her nudity in a different perspective, as a truly liberating act (particularly so for women) and accepting its inherent sensuality -- much as that on a nude beach -- and incorporating that nudity into her regular life in some fashion, I am still giving this a 10/10 despite that reservation and with the exception of the stereotype of the father, interesting characters. But, it is sexual fantasy and I'm writing of it as though it were a main stream novel. A wonderful, wonderful piece. Thanks. (10/10)
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cc_local
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May 3, 2005 |
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Brilliant! The author creates a story environment using just a few distortions of real life. Then populates the story with very believable characters and events. I was surprised over and over again by clever twists and turns in the plot. Very enjoyable. (10/10)
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MasterRJ
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Jan 4, 2005 |
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This story was just spectacular. The end was sad though...I agree with all that was said here. Great story, very innovative, and yes I can think of ten things I'd like to do to Jones' testicles with a baseball bat :3 Easily in the top ten of anything I've ever read...and I mean that. (10/10)
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mkemse
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Jun 24, 2004 |
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outstanding, as with me one of the best i have read
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D. Atrocity
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May 26, 2004 |
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I like Shannon very well, too. This is one of the best (and longest!) male dominenence stories I've ever read. You only had a few problmes with grammar and I only noticed them the second time I read this. I'd also like to know a little more about what happened to Shannon's Biology teacher. You did a very good job overall for such a large work. BtW: Did you write this from an outline? (9/10)
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thehuntedone
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Apr 26, 2004 |
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Very imaginative and excellently executed. There isn't much else I can add to the already glowing reviews. One of the few stories that has been able to keep my excitement at a peak throughout each chapter, and this is a long story. I'm only sorry it had to end. (10/10)
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cerdic
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Mar 25, 2004 |
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Well written characters and dialogue. Premise of the story was a bit stretched, but once that was accepted it was actually a decent read. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
25toLife
(Edit) (Mar 13, 2007)
- YOU ARE AN IDIOT. PERIOD.
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jbowler65
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Mar 12, 2004 |
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Outstanding work. We loved the humiliation in the story as we read through it. Very well thought out and written. (10/10)
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CarolinaSpkr
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Jan 9, 2004 |
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I really thought you did a great job of expressing there humiliation. The tampon scene and vaginal shaving were well told.
The humiliation of the coach seeing the tampon string from below was also memorable.
I would have enjoyed a paddling here or there but the spanking was a good touch. Also I would have liked to see a mention of how it felt to have their butt holes on dispay. (10/10)
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crickette
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Dec 2, 2003 |
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10! Hands Down! I was very impressed with not only the storyline and the development of the characters but your ability to keep the timeline of events consistent. No one was told to get dressed after a previous paragraph had already stated that they were. I also was impressed with the countless situations you divised to humiliate the students, especially Shannon. They were very creative and effective. Being a hopeless romantic I loved the idea that Shannon and Carrie both had their Knights in Shining Armor. Admittedly, I would liked to have seen Mr.Jones get hit ny a truck or left dangling upside down by his balls.....but you can't win them all! Again, great story. I look forward to reading more of your work in the near future.
(10/10)
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janan3s
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Dec 19, 2002 |
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One of the best. It can compete with the story of Richard the Orphan by Jane Marwood. This is as humiliating as it can be. I haven't even read it all the way yet, but even now I already cannot imagine any more embarrassing situations. Katie can! One slight complaint: the part with the naked boy had sex, but no one is allowed to touch the girl. That's a shame! Of course I don't mean gangbangs and stuff like that but a little more groping and making her cum would have been nice.
I look forward to something more of this kind to come! (10/10)
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Taisho
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Dec 16, 2002 |
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Oh yes, definitely my 'thing' too. So sweet how the cute schoolgirl begins to yearn for little consessions like getting to wear socks...(for some reason I find the idea of a girl stripped down to just shoes and socks more humiliating for her than being totally naked - or is it just me?) (10/10)
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dom19_n
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Oct 17, 2002 |
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Superb. Incredible humiliation and embarrassment, as the good little schoolgirl Shannon Malone is forced into ever more obscene displays by the school administration, neighbors and friends. Long, but it keeps your interest, and it sure kept my cock hard throughout. (10/10)
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