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My First Time
Author: Kathy
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(Added on Sep 12, 2002)
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True account of meeting between myself and Dom. My reluctant introduction to BDSM. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
Tim_Id
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Sep 18, 2002 |
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Nice start, but a little too rushed, a lot of gaps need to be filled in to get the reader to care about these characters. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
tsosie
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Sep 15, 2002 |
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I think it is a very interesting siuation that I imagine would be difficult to write about perfectly. I think it was a good story but reading the trailing end of what happens makes me want to see more depth. It's like having a "happy" ending without all the trials and difficulties before it. Thanks for the good story :) (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
boccaccio2000g
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Sep 14, 2002 |
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I am always a little doubtful about "reluctant" rapes -- women who resist at first and then find themselves won over by the man's dominance or mastery or whatever. Does this really happen in real life?
The writing in this story is quite capable, accurate, and free from error -- but lacking a bit in color, in vitality. The author might consider how to use adjectives and adverbs to dress it up a little bit, add a few more tactile details -- how things looked, sounded, tasted, felt etc. We authors have been entrusted with five senses - it is our challenge to convey our sense-uality to our readers (6/10)
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- Replied by:
kathympython
(Edit) (Sep 14, 2002)
- I most definitely am NOT a writer, I think of myself more as a diarist than anything else. Can only really speak of what is true, because I lack imagination. I would be the first to admit it.
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| Reviewer:
greenhornt
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Sep 13, 2002 |
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Nice story. Kept me interested till the end. Need some editing though. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
veru_skjava
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Sep 13, 2002 |
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Author is capable with spelling and grammar, so it has potential to develop into a decent story. I had to keep remembering I was supposed to be reading a story. It went so fast with no substance, it reads like a journal entry. Hopefully the author will be able to rewrite the first chapter and make it more appetizing. Good idea for a story though. (5/10)
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- Replied by:
kathympython
(Edit) (Sep 14, 2002)
- I most definitely am NOT a writer, I think of myself more as a diarist than anything else. Can only really speak of what is true, because I lack imagination. I would be the first to admit it.
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| Reviewer:
smikes
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Sep 13, 2002 |
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Very good story Keep up the good work ! (9/10)
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