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Spread 'em
Author: Charles Frank
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(Added on Aug 30, 2002)
(This month 278459 readers) (Total 533807 readers) |
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A female asian cop is taken in by her Captain and made to do what he desires. she is turned into his slave and has to do everything with everyone, even though she is about to become his Sgt. |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
ALLAHHAVEMERCY
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May 13, 2011 |
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one of the best stories I ever read. Simply awesome. Just too long to finish (10/10)
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mavuong
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Nov 30, 2005 |
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best story ! (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Nitrofox
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Oct 2, 2004 |
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The problem with this story is that it is so ridiculously unbelievable:
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The captain said, "Good little slut. Now, just so you won't think about telling others about this, I have a video of you stripping and sucking my cock. Of course, it will be edited to say that you wanted this job so much that you were willing to do anything to get it. That's when you begged me to suck my cock. You even stripped for me to persuade me. So, you little asian whore, you won't tell anyone will you?"
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This is ridiculous. If she had any brains whatsoever (which I suppose is debatable), she would realize that that kind of editing is impossible.
Next, although this should probably have been mentioned first, is that, though I don't know the police process, I doubt that a mere police chief could get all her immigration information, much less find paper proof that she is an illegal.
I did not give this a 2/10 because of writing. There are well-defined paragraphs and all, but I find Sue's way of speaking ludicrous. Nobody elongates the things they say so ridiculously. Maybe it looks alright on paper (which I dispute), but it would sound preposterous.
My final complaint is that this story is excessively long and becomes more improbably by the page. I understand that this is supposed to be fiction, but not EVERY male in the town that she runs into can be a chauvinist pig. Isn't there anyone reasonable enough to help her out?
This story got more and more repetitive, and ultimately, boring, I'm sorry to say. There were some interesting things very early on, but to drag the story out, and then bring the sister in was just excessive. I think it could be much improved by chopping of the last 75% of the story and having some nice guy help her out, and then she willingly becomes his slave or something. (2/10)
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gojack10
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Apr 10, 2004 |
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I lost interest on this by the 5th paragraph... Why is it so hard to make characters at least semi-believable? A female cop moaning as they grab the crotch of a drunk driver just is not erotic, or literature. Hmmmmmmm.
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<<"SPREAD 'EM"
She forced his feet apart, and then began the search of his body. She ran her
hands over his body, and couldn't resist checking out the package he had in
his pants. As she reached his crotch, she lingered a little longer than normal
and squeezed his cock. "MMMMMMM," she quietly moaned, and then continued on to
the rest of his body. She finished the search, cuffed him, read him his
rights, and informed him he was being arrested for DUI>>
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Sep 8, 2003 |
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Like the story but it is getting to long and complicated and draggy
get back to the blackmail theme on it, have her huniliated more, focus back on what she did, how she got blackmailed and make her pay, don't get lost in long drawn out chapters, don't become repetative (7/10)
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aztec
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Aug 30, 2003 |
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Great story! I'd have liked to see it go an at least a chapter after the tables turn on Judy. Maybe a Postscript? (9/10)
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torny
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Jul 23, 2003 |
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I enjoy reading each installment but it is very long. Maybe a new story with the same sort of ideas??? (8/10)
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Kostly
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Jul 21, 2003 |
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It needs to end...
I love it... one of the best.. but if you want to make it longer, revisit the original chapters and add new Ideas... Besides for that it is one of my favorites (9/10)
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woolfighter
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Apr 12, 2003 |
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I hope and the end of the story the meaning of police dog is another. :)Great story. (9/10)
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lex ludite
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Mar 14, 2003 |
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Around and around and around it goes, where it stops nobody, including the author it seems, knows. This story has spun out of control and is headed for the ditch. (6/10)
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texswim
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Feb 18, 2003 |
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A really great story with great humiliation and some pain and pleasure! (10/10)
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Silenteyes
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Jan 19, 2003 |
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I believethis story is very good, but the repetitiveness is too much. I had trouble towards the end because of this. But outside of that I really enjoyed this story. I have to say I like the idea of of this story taking place with law inforcement, the power with which they have to begin with and this adds to the excitement of this story. (9/10)
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gundam
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Jan 16, 2003 |
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great story, keep it up, cheer (9/10)
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vicente
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Jan 3, 2003 |
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excellent story- cant wait till next chapters (10/10)
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fox21
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Oct 2, 2002 |
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The story is funny (7) and well written (8), but scenes are poor and a little "repetitive" (1). In order to improve, the author should add more spark and more variety... I'd reconsider the overall rating because the subject is really OK! (5/10)
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boccaccio2000g
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Sep 30, 2002 |
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Maybe I'm getting old, but this story just doesn't do much for me; the writing is capable, and free from error, but lacks the spark, the sizzle, that should make me want to keep turning the pages. The author (as in Tracy) has an abundance of interesting ideas; but I don't think the garb he wraps them in quite does them justice. Quantity at the expense of quality perhaps? I'm not sure; but this story could be better than it is. And perhaps it may yet be. (7/10)
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asdflkj20
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Sep 30, 2002 |
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Good writing. Many great original ideas. (9/10)
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elee1000
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Sep 29, 2002 |
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Come on, admit it! The author has imagine and creativity, and surprises the reader time and time again! (10/10)
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hyphen666
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Sep 24, 2002 |
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Now that the story is finally in gear, it's apparent that the author has not lost his touch. The vibrating phone is a nice concept, something out of the ordinary, a big plus. I'm still not totally convinced that law enforcement is the proper medium to use for a story like this, only time and the author's fertile imagination will answer that question. There is however one thing that has not happened yet and is vital to the ultimate success of this work. When will he begin to add more characters to the mix? This is really what made Tracy in Trouble as good as it was. So until I see further character development my rating for this story will remain where it was. (6/10)
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smmaster
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Sep 20, 2002 |
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i beleive that it is a great one. (10/10)
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veru_skjava
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Sep 13, 2002 |
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I agree with Hyphen, and waited to read more of the story. It is enjoyable, and I look forward to reading additional chapters, where I will reconsider the rating (which is so hard to do at times) (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
raveena
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Sep 5, 2002 |
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there should be training organised for the women police officers so that they can learn the art of giving blow jobs to their senior police officers. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
Nitrofox
(Edit) (Aug 24, 2004)
- Just because this story isn't EXACTLY what you want it to be doesn't mean it merits a 6/10.
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